opinions about current web copy

[vangogh]

Dan does my avatar look like it gained weight recently?

[Just H]

Looks like the right ear is a little fatter!

I agree w/ the previous comments. (Also, there's an extra space after link for "other skin care treatments" and the period. I don't see much call to action or anything much compelling me to keep reading.

If I were searching out this type of treatment and lived in the area, I probably would contact the woman though. I think the emphasis should be on the spa/self-care part that isn't absolutely necessary and drive to action based on that - giving yourself some attention to look and feel better.

[vangogh]

I'll put my lobe on a diet then. That's where all the weight seems to go.

[Paul Elliott]

The copy and approach has a distinctly Oxford English tone probably from the owner's background. That's fine but there are a number of grammatical errors in the copy on several pages which should be corrected by someone who knows good editing.

More later.

Paul